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托福考試寫作拿高分的祕訣

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在托福考試的寫作部分拿到高分是很多考生都希望的,這就需要考生多掌握寫作的高分祕訣了。下面小編將為你推薦托福考試寫作拿高分的實用祕訣,希望能夠幫到你!

托福考試寫作拿高分的祕訣

  託福寫作高分的訣竅:學會舉例論證

在備考託福寫作的過程中,不少拿不到寫作高分的中國學生遇到的問題不是看不懂題目,也不是想不到理由,甚至也不是寫不到300字(我見過有學生寫了470字,卻只得了fair),而是不會論證。"不會論證"這四個字幾乎就是託福寫作的死穴。考官們反覆強調fully developed的重要性,說的也就是這個理兒。論證的主要方法有直接論證、舉例子、引用他人觀點和資料等等。在這裡,最適合中國學生操作,也是最容易得高分的就是舉例子了。

然而,舉例子這個方法向來不為中國學生所重視。因為對於大多數學生來說,舉例子實在是太容易不過了,只要寫上for example之類的提示詞,再寫上人盡皆知的諸如Einstein, Newton之類的例子就萬事大吉了。而事實上,這樣的例子考官早已經看過成百上千遍了,怎麼可能再給高分呢?

因此,要想舉出高分的例子,最好是寫兩種例子:

1)美國人所熟知的歷史、文化的例子,但一定要有一些新意,不是講爛了的Galileo, Mother Teresa之流

2)講自己身邊的故事。

這是考生能夠選用第一種例子,用得恰當的話自然能讓考官眼前為之一亮。例如在討論媒體對人們的.影響時,選用美國人所熟知的脫口秀女王Oprah Winfrey作為例子。或是在討論學生是否都應該學習歷史的時候,選用美國曆史上知名的總統,如Thomas Jefferson, Herbert Hoover等進行論證都非常好。這樣做既進行了有效論證,又不落入俗套。然而,舉這類例子對於考生考前的積累要求比較高。如果距離考試還有三個月或以上的時間,我建議考生可以在考前多準備一些類似的人物或事件的例子,以備考試之用。在這裡,推薦給大家幾個參考的網站:維基百科,紐約時報,華爾街日報,和 American thinker,這些都是很好的收集素材的網站。

對於大多數備考時間比較緊的考生來說,花大量的時間去準備第一種例子顯得有些不太划算。因此,價效比比較高的第二種例子更適合於備考時間比較短的考生。托福考試僅僅是語言能力考試,只要能用恰當的例子論述清楚問題就可以,因此用自己或身邊人的例子對於考官來說也有很大的說服力。

有的考生仍然會問,那我身邊沒有那麼多的例子可以用怎麼辦?這個時候,對待考官就不能這麼"死心眼"了,就要學會"編例子"。但是"編例子"也要有技巧,也要讓考官信服,絕非信口胡編。在這裡介紹三個小技巧,幫助你把例子編得更生動。

1) 加上姓名、時間、地點等

很多中國學生在寫例子的時候會使用"比如說有一個人……"這樣的表達。這樣的表達看起來底氣不足,且中式思維嚴重,很難受到考官青睞。考生完全可以改用另外的表達"我有一個朋友叫Peter,他在兩年前做了XX事……"這樣寫就看起來舒服多了。在敘述個人類例子的時候,儘量使用具體的人名、地名和時間。這樣能使你的例子看上去更豐滿、富有細節,也更像真實的事件,有說服力。

2) 與論點結合,寫出XX之前和XX之後的變化

需要特別注意的是,例子一定是為論證服務的,絕不能脫離主題舉例子。有的考生非常心醉於自己編出來的故事,但是卻忘了自己在寫託福作文,這個故事並不能證明你的觀點,那這樣的文章得不到高分一點也不奇怪。

這裡的XX指的是論點中的主題詞。例如在寫機經中的一個題目:公共交通是否應該免費時,有一個分論點是公共交通免費以後,私家車會減少,這樣尾氣排放得少了,環境也就變好了。這裡的主題詞就是私家車的數量,例子就可以寫成N年前私家車很少,環境很好,然後私家車變多以後,環境就變差了。

例子可寫成:10 years ago, in my childhood memory, the city which I live in now is one of the most beautiful cities I have ever seen. The blue sky and the clean water were quite impressive to me. However, 3 years ago, when I came back to this city again, I was astonished by those changes. The city developed rapidly during those days. There are far more private cars than years ago on the road every day. On average, every household has one or two cars. The city may be described as "developed" now, while the sky here is never as clear as ever.

這個例子當中所用的詞彙、句型基本都是中學所學過的。但是其中用到了我們剛才所談的第一個技巧,加上了時間細節,也用到了第二個技巧,扣緊了主題,說明了有私家車變多之前和之後的變化。這個例子看上去文采平實,但卻符合托福考試的評分規範,單就這個例子而言,就是可以得到4~5分的高分的(滿分5分)。

3) 寫完例子以後,一定要再結合論點論證說理

這一點不難理解,卻是很多考生所忽視的。再強調一遍,例子的存在是為了更好地論證論點,因此在寫完例子以後,需要再加上至少1~2句話重申一下你的論點。例如上文中出現的例子,寫完之後,還應再加上If the amount of the cars can be reduced, I believe it will further improve the environment here, and be beneficial to all the citizens here as well. And The free payment of pubic transportation will make this come true.這樣就是一個完整的論述段了。

如果考生們可以掌握上述的三個技巧,就可以寫出一篇內容充實又論證有力的託福高分作文的。當然,大家要牢記熟能生巧這四個字,然後多多練習,這樣才能在考試中無往不利。

  託福寫作高分的三個重要原則

1. Write a topic sentence for each paragraph you plan to write. Each topic sentence should relate to your thesis statement and introduce what the paragraph will be about. If you find that the topics you want to discuss do not support the thesis statement you have written, revise your thesis statement or reconsider your topic sentences.

(每個主體段都必須有一個明確的主題句)

2. Write ideas that support your topic sentences. The topic sentence for each paragraph tells the reader what the paragraph will be about. The ideas stated in the rest of the paragraph should all relate to the topic sentence.

(支援句必須圍繞主題句展開)

根據第2條的原則,我們來看看下面這個主體段:

Hobbies are important for many reasons. First, a hobby can be educational. For example, if the hobby is stamp collecting, the person can learn about the countries of the world and even some of their history. Second, engaging in a hobby can lead to meeting other people with the same interests. A person can also meet other people by going to the school. Third, a persons free time is being used in a positive way. The person has no time to be bored or get into mischief while engaged in the hobby. Finally, some hobbies can lead to a future job. A person who enjoys a hobby-related job is more satisfied with life.

這段話的topic sentence很明顯-Hobbies are important for many reasons,之後的支援句從三方面闡述hobby的重要性(first, second, third),但段中這句話A person can also meet other people by going the school與hobby重要的原因沒有關係,因此削弱了整個段落的連貫性與統一性,應該被去掉。

3. Add details. To write a more fully developed paragraph, you need to add details to your supporting ideas. Your details can be facts, examples, personal experiences, or descriptions.

(需要用多種方式提供細節展開段落)

The Smithsonian Institution is worth visiting for a number of reasons. The Smithsonian Institution comprises various museums that offer something for everyone. These museums include the National Museum of History and Technology, the National Aeronautics and Space Museum, the National Collection of Fine Arts, the National Museum of Natural History, and several others. A person can do more than just look at the exhibits. For example, in the insect zoo at the National Museum of Natural History, anyone who so desires can handle some of the exhibits. The museums provide unforgettable experiences. In climbing through the Skylab exhibit at the National Aeronautics and Space Museum, I was able to imagine what it would be like to be an astronaut in space. Movies shown at regular intervals aid in building an appreciation of our world. In the National Aeronautics and Space Museum, there is a theater that has a large screen. When the movie is shown, it gives the viewer the feeling that he or she is in the movie itself, either floating above the Earth in a hot-air balloon or hang gliding over cliffs.

這是一個成功的主題段,請注意這段話段落細節展開的幾種形式-提供事實、舉例、個人經歷和描述。我們把這個段落拆分後進行分析:

Topic sentence(主題句)

The Smithsonian Institution is worth visiting for a number of reasons.

Supporting idea 1(支援理由1)

The Smithsonian Institution comprises various museums that offer something for everyone.

Details – facts(細節展開-提供事實)

These museums include the National Museum of History and Technology, the National Aeronautics and Space Museum, the National Collection of Fine Arts, the National Museum of Natural History, and several others.

Supporting idea 2(支援理由2)

A person can do more than just look at the exhibits.

Details – examples(細節展開-舉例)

For example, in the insect zoo at the National Museum of Natural History, anyone who so desires can handle some of the exhibits.

Supporting idea 3(支援理由3)

The museums provide unforgettable experiences.

Details – personal experience(細節展開-個人經歷)

In climbing through the Skylab exhibit at the National Aeronautics and Space Museum, I was able to imagine what it would be like to be an astronaut in space.

Supporting idea 4(支援理由4)

Movies shown at regular intervals aid in building an appreciation of our world.

Details – description(細節展開-描述)

In the National Aeronautics and Space Museum, there is a theater that has a large screen. When the movie is shown, it gives the viewer the feeling that he or she is in the movie itself, either floating above the Earth in a hot-air balloon or hang gliding over cliffs.

  託福寫作高分練習素材:出國留學經歷的利弊分析

The independent essay usually asks for your opinion about a familiar topic. You will have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your response. Typically, a good essay for the independent topic will require that you write 300–350 words.

Question:

You are planning to study abroad. What do you think you will like and dislike about this experience? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

參考分析:

本題要求考生通過定位,概括和分類仔細審題,就某個問題寫一篇感想,或就一個事件進行闡述,解釋以及論證自己的觀點,列出提綱明確主題並圍繞主題來寫作和修改文章。

My mother once told me that she could always find my eyes shining at the mention of going abroad for further education. There is no denying the fact that I have strong desire of my oversea trip and have planed of it for a long period since I began my high school time. In fact, I am only a typical example of those young students who have the some dream. A result of recent survey, released by a famous magazine in my hometown showed that more than 72 percent local high school students has pleasant association with studying abroad. Anyway, such decisions can benefit a young man a great deal while it is not without its problems.

Will oversea colleges and universities, especially those in America, provide Chinese student a more refined education? The data I select over this year leads to me believe that the answer is undoubtedly positive, since those abroad universities, which enjoy high reputations world-widely, have faculty and advanced facility. It is the education with totally different conceptions that will exert positively influence on one by widening his or her horizon, whereby he/she can put him/herself in a favorable position in the future job markets.

Secondly, which is another conspicuous advantage of the oversea life, it can bring one friends from a variety of countries. Seldom can one have an adjust judgement to a remote nation without consorting with the people from that area. As my cousin, who has been living in England for over seven years, pointed out, she learns a lot from her foreign friends.

However, we immature students should be blind to the dilemma we may face toward in the future. Living in a foreign country means one should try hard to adapt him/herself to a new environment and, in addition, probably have to suffer from the segregation with family.

After the both sides of abroad life are viewed, it is time to draw my conclusion. In short, the study in a foreign university will be a precious experience to a young man as long as he/she can overcome the difficulty he/she may encounter.